If you like a beautiful story, then take a moment to read this short tale by Chloe from St Edward's School.
Olly the Owl
Olly the owl is a wise old owl, he lives in an old wooden barn in the heart of a dark and eerie forest. Olly has beautiful, snow white feathers that shimmer in the moonlight as he swoops through the trees searching for his evening meal.
He loves the winter and the cold night air, it makes him think about when he was a small owl and used to hunt with his father. It was while he was hunting that Olly discovered the secret that lurked in the dark woods.
One night, Olly saw something that made him feel uncomfortable; he had heard a story about a monster that stole children, but he never thought it was true, but there before his eyes was a big, hairy, purple, monster, which had a child in its hands.
Olly was scared for the child and knew he had to do something quickly! He swooped down quietly behind the monster and bit him as hard as he could, the monster fell to the ground with a thump, Olly bravely got the child and flew away. Then he took her home.
That night Olly was my hero.
By Chloe from St Edward's School
Reasons why this is brilliant
1. Chloe set the scene. She introduced the main character and described its surroundings.
2. She's used poetic language like 'beautiful, snow white feathers that shimmer in the moonlight'.
3. She's given Olly a mini backstory (hunting with his father).
4. She introduced conflict (the hairy purple monster holding the child).
5. She resolved the conflict.
6. She included a twist ending (i.e. something unexpected happened, which changed my understanding of the story). I thought I was reading about a stranger, then the last line says 'Olly was my hero'. So it could actually be a story about Chloe.
Over the next few weeks, we'll learn all about setting a scene, introducing conflict and resolving conflict, just like Chloe did in her story.
Chloe, have you considered making this story into a words and picture book with watercolour illustrations? Such a book would be wonderful.
Olly the Owl
Olly the owl is a wise old owl, he lives in an old wooden barn in the heart of a dark and eerie forest. Olly has beautiful, snow white feathers that shimmer in the moonlight as he swoops through the trees searching for his evening meal.
He loves the winter and the cold night air, it makes him think about when he was a small owl and used to hunt with his father. It was while he was hunting that Olly discovered the secret that lurked in the dark woods.
One night, Olly saw something that made him feel uncomfortable; he had heard a story about a monster that stole children, but he never thought it was true, but there before his eyes was a big, hairy, purple, monster, which had a child in its hands.
Olly was scared for the child and knew he had to do something quickly! He swooped down quietly behind the monster and bit him as hard as he could, the monster fell to the ground with a thump, Olly bravely got the child and flew away. Then he took her home.
That night Olly was my hero.
By Chloe from St Edward's School
Reasons why this is brilliant
1. Chloe set the scene. She introduced the main character and described its surroundings.
2. She's used poetic language like 'beautiful, snow white feathers that shimmer in the moonlight'.
3. She's given Olly a mini backstory (hunting with his father).
4. She introduced conflict (the hairy purple monster holding the child).
5. She resolved the conflict.
6. She included a twist ending (i.e. something unexpected happened, which changed my understanding of the story). I thought I was reading about a stranger, then the last line says 'Olly was my hero'. So it could actually be a story about Chloe.
Over the next few weeks, we'll learn all about setting a scene, introducing conflict and resolving conflict, just like Chloe did in her story.
Chloe, have you considered making this story into a words and picture book with watercolour illustrations? Such a book would be wonderful.
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