I enjoyed reading the work from Highfield School so much that I decided to share the entire piece. It starts off with a hilarious address, and the intrigue continues ...
'The address is Whiff Towers, Bogie Bank, Whiffleton on the Swamp, Bogshire, SME 11Y
Whiff Towers is an abandoned and run down castle. At least, everyone thinks it’s abandoned.
To get there you have to follow a dirt road through a dark forest, where it always rains and the tree branches brush against you like cold fingers. The dirt road comes to an end, and suddenly you find yourself in boggy swampland. The swamp echoes with the screams of a thousand souls who are forever lost in the swamp. There is a way across the swamp, but only if the castle wants you to come in…
If the castle welcomes you, a drawbridge across the swamp and lake slowly lowers with a clanking chain. Cross carefully…the bridge is narrow and the swamp could take you at any time. Crossing over the swamp leads you to a lake. The lake smells like rotting fish and the water is so black it is like looking into a well that goes on forever.
If you are welcome, the castle door will open with a creak and a clank. The air inside is perfectly still and makes you feel afraid to move or breathe. The castle is dark and dusty and you feel like someone is there. When you call, no one answers.'
Why I love this
1. It's full of suspense. Will the castle welcome Simon and Tigotha, or won't it? Is there anybody in the castle?
2. The place names are very colourful and funny.
3. Swamps add an element of danger to any story.
4. The tree branches brushing against cold fingers is creepy.
'The address is Whiff Towers, Bogie Bank, Whiffleton on the Swamp, Bogshire, SME 11Y
Whiff Towers is an abandoned and run down castle. At least, everyone thinks it’s abandoned.
To get there you have to follow a dirt road through a dark forest, where it always rains and the tree branches brush against you like cold fingers. The dirt road comes to an end, and suddenly you find yourself in boggy swampland. The swamp echoes with the screams of a thousand souls who are forever lost in the swamp. There is a way across the swamp, but only if the castle wants you to come in…
If the castle welcomes you, a drawbridge across the swamp and lake slowly lowers with a clanking chain. Cross carefully…the bridge is narrow and the swamp could take you at any time. Crossing over the swamp leads you to a lake. The lake smells like rotting fish and the water is so black it is like looking into a well that goes on forever.
If you are welcome, the castle door will open with a creak and a clank. The air inside is perfectly still and makes you feel afraid to move or breathe. The castle is dark and dusty and you feel like someone is there. When you call, no one answers.'
Why I love this
1. It's full of suspense. Will the castle welcome Simon and Tigotha, or won't it? Is there anybody in the castle?
2. The place names are very colourful and funny.
3. Swamps add an element of danger to any story.
4. The tree branches brushing against cold fingers is creepy.
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