I've been busy re-reading your brilliant blurbs and trying to put the best bits together. Because blurbs have to be short and snappy, I had to leave out some of the subplots (like Simon and Tigotha falling out) even though those are very important to the story.
Here is my first draft of the blurb. What do you think? Do you like it? Can it be improved?
Deadly ducks with an appetite for chaos, are planning to take over Fangleland. So called because of their luminous poo, the lumipoo momps begin their mayhem by banning bananas – the punishment, getting spiked to death!
Simon is just a regular boy, whose life is turned upside down when his dying grandpa reveals that his parents were killed by a flock of lumipoo momps. He and his beloved best friend, Tigotha, set off on a perilous journey to save Fangleland.
Meanwhile, a scientist tries to invent a predator to eat the lumipoo momps. However, when his plan goes horribly wrong, the heroes end up fighting not just one species of monster – but two!
Simon and Tigotha’s adventure raises many questions. Who is the mysterious caretaker and what is he doing with that hoover? Why is there a disco happening in the microwave? And who is the toddler with helicopter hair, who keeps turning up to save the day?
Are you aching to know whether the monster avengers save Fangleland? Turn the pages if you dare – these monsters would like to eat you for breakfast!
Here is my first draft of the blurb. What do you think? Do you like it? Can it be improved?
Deadly ducks with an appetite for chaos, are planning to take over Fangleland. So called because of their luminous poo, the lumipoo momps begin their mayhem by banning bananas – the punishment, getting spiked to death!
Simon is just a regular boy, whose life is turned upside down when his dying grandpa reveals that his parents were killed by a flock of lumipoo momps. He and his beloved best friend, Tigotha, set off on a perilous journey to save Fangleland.
Meanwhile, a scientist tries to invent a predator to eat the lumipoo momps. However, when his plan goes horribly wrong, the heroes end up fighting not just one species of monster – but two!
Simon and Tigotha’s adventure raises many questions. Who is the mysterious caretaker and what is he doing with that hoover? Why is there a disco happening in the microwave? And who is the toddler with helicopter hair, who keeps turning up to save the day?
Are you aching to know whether the monster avengers save Fangleland? Turn the pages if you dare – these monsters would like to eat you for breakfast!
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